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Hey all! Adding the first part of a story I'm writing. Creative juices have been flowing lately both with research and with fun stuff, so thought I'd share. Hoping to get the next chapter out after Thanksgiving. This is the story of a brat and his dom, growing together. The more they act out their roles... Well, I'll let you folks figure that one out hehe. The characters are exaggerated, yes. But I had fun building them. Enjoy!

Fine… Be a Brat

Andy quickly ran his fingers through his honey blond hair, sweeping it back and out of his emerald eyes. His perfectly maintained lab coat was almost blindingly white, matching the pristine teeth that Dan had so graciously given him last month. Just because. He giggled a little thinking about it, flashing a blinding smile that made Yolanda Ángeles, the lab tech from epigenetics, blush all the way to her ears. She grinned and looked away from him, swiping her nearly perfectly manicured nails through her raven hair. He saw the tiniest of chips in the cerulean polish on her left pointer nail. Once he walked past her and no one could see his face, Andy’s smile got even broader. “Oh honey, I’m much more high maintenance than you. You couldn’t afford me on a lab tech salary. My last facial cost as much as that Sentra you drive.” He thought, in a self-satisfied manner. His smoldering eyes glittered with excitement. Just the perks of having a man like Danny: Andy’s daily allowance was enough to be considered “fuck you money” by even some of the doctors here, even if he didn’t spend it all. The lab tech had quietly amassed a tidy nest egg. He looked down slightly as he pulled his card key out of his pocket. With a swipe he pushed the door open.

The brilliant white of the lab poured into his eyes as he walked in. He blinked at the overall brightness as his eyes adjusted to the sterile room. Chrome fixtures glittered on the tables and under the chemical hoods that lined the walls. It was totally devoid of all personal character. Professor Luthers, Andy’s biology advisor in college, had encouraged putting one’s own spice on their workspace by putting up pictures or even naming the lab equipment. The man called the centrifuge ‘Shirley Temple’ because of the way it tap-danced across the counter without its little rubber feet, for god’s sake. Andy could almost hear the professor whistling “Animal Crackers in my soup…” But Dr. Chapin, the lab manager, was a different story. He had split his life into little compartments, quarantining the various aspects of his person into boxes. Everyone here was expected to do the same. Andy smiled as his eyes adjusted and zeroed in on the only other person in the lab, an elderly man by the name of Lewis Branson who had run their lab section for the past five years.

“Oh… Hullo, Andrew. Good to see you today. I wasn’t sure our shifts would line up ever again.” The gray-haired doctor at the counter looked at him and smiled benignly. Andy gave a slightly forced grin.

“Hello there, Dr. Branson. Always a pleasure. I’ve recently returned to the morning shift after working afternoons while my partner was doing the same” Andy twiddled his hands a little. “We try to line up our schedules to spend as much time as possible together.” The ancient scientist was the only one in the entire facility that called him ‘Andrew,’ and it slightly irked him. Dr. Branson knew there was also a young lady here that went by the name ‘Andi,’ and somehow the nickname ‘Andy with a y’ didn’t quite stick in his octogenarian head. Being called Andrew reminded him too much of his rich bitch of a mother.

Andy could almost see her sniff as she said “Nicknames are unbecoming of a person of your social standing, dear. It’s so terribly middle class.” Well, once he had finished college on her dime, he cut her off and never saw her again. He liked being pretty and rich, but he didn’t fancy being a part of his mother’s collection. He would not be a bauble on the shelf. Thank goodness Danny gave him the life to which he had grown accustomed. And then some.

“What are you working on today, sir?”

“Well, I believe I may have finally made a breakthrough in the anxiety case…” He held up a vial of liquid that was somehow a lurid pink that even Pepto Bismol couldn’t hope to imitate. “You know I’ve been working on helping people with crippling anxiety correct their brain chemistry so that they can more fully participate in society, yes? I figured that if I can use this to turn half of the four f’s off, and the other half on…” The old man shrugged.

“The four f’s? I thought there were only three.”

“Quite… fight, flight, or freeze. But we all know the fourth.” The old man was suddenly quite shifty. He looked like a boy with his hand caught in the cookie jar. Andy had never known him to be naughty. “Fuuuornication. Fornication.”

Andy flashed a winning smile at the doctor, thoroughly amused. “So, this flips off those two switches then.”

“Oh yes! Those get turned off and allow the patient to have more fun, loosen up. Not be rolled over by others.” The doctor put the vial back in the small refrigerator, locking it. “Maybe even help them be a little more assertive. We just have to be careful. I’m not entirely sure what it’ll do to a healthy brain yet.” Dr. Branson turned and found himself face to face with Andy’s chest. “Oh… um… you’re a little close there, Andrew.” Andy licked his lips and gave his hard chest a gentle pop in the doctor’s face, keeping his attention focused right on him. It was easy to reach around and slide the coin into the latch to prevent the fridge from sealing completely.

“Have you worked out a dosage yet, doctor?” Andy gave his winningest smile, knowing that the doctor was one of those he could easily push around using just his looks and charm. Andy’s brilliant white teeth glittered, reflected in the doctor’s doe eyes. Branson was asexual for all he knew, but he could still be distracted and plied with the right moves. With something as simple as putting his ample chest close to the doctor’s face, Andy managed to fluster his coworker to the point of nearly being a drooling idiot. He grinned. He had that effect on most men. Danny was the only one that seemed capable of resisting his charm. Andy had made sure that everything about his body was sculpted perfection, even before Danny’s money. He pushed his arms together slightly, pushing his pecs forward and making the ample mounds rise and harden. The topmost button, always so loose these days, popped open with ease and revealed another two inches of meaty pec cleavage along with his clean-shaven chest. His chest looked almost grainy with the gooseflesh on it from the chill environment of the lab. Andy’s biceps quivered slightly in his tight sleeves as they rose closer to their twenty-one-inch peaked height. “I would love to know how you calculate your dosages for trials. I’m always looking for new methods that are healthier for our clients and subjects.”

“Well… I… generally do about two milligrams per kilo of bodyweight. I would need a 100mg dose once a day. So, someone like you…” The doctor gulped. “Would probably need about 250mg to 290mg per day.” He gulped again.

“And someone bigger than me? Say around…”

“It doesn’t matter…” The doctor slipped away. “Two milligrams per kilogram is about what you’ll need.” Andy smiled. Branson hadn’t noticed that the fridge didn’t fully latch. That pink stuff was going to be in his lunchbox this afternoon. He just knew it. As Branson turned away, Andy licked his lips. If it could make someone with anxiety more assertive, then what would it do to him?

*          *          *

The car horn honked as Andy pressed the button on the key fob. He had shucked his lab coat in favor of his deerskin leather jacket. The fluffy wool of the collar and cuffs kept him nice and warm in the crisp November air. He loved the way the faun color accentuated his features perfectly. His gaze was opaqued by a pair of mirrored aviator shades that only enhanced his lantern jaw and the perfectly kept stubble. His hair shook a little in the wind, the brilliant blond shimmering as his Tesla pulled up to where he stood. Andy slipped into the driver’s seat and placed his lunchbox on the chair next to him. He made sure to turn the air conditioner down as much as possible, keeping the entire vehicle frigid. Andy gave a little smirk, thinking about the pink tube in his lunchbox. Branson was so easy to distract. One or two pops with his pecs and Andy had been able to pop the latch on the fridge. His smirk turned into a full-on grin as he sped out of the parking lot. His prodigious manhood gave a light twitch in his pants, slowly hardening as he thought about the powerful hands that Dan had made him build, glad he had been able to give the lightest of squeezes on the latch and snap it. Andy gripped the steering wheel a little tighter and watched as his forearms rippled. He licked his lips.

Andy was hot. He knew it. His head just barely brushed the roof of his car thanks to his six-foot six height. His thick, 275-pound body filled the space between the steering wheel and the seat.  His pecs heaved as the car slowly made its way through the streets and began to drive itself to the highway. He relaxed a little as he took the ramp onto the interstate that would take him home. With a quick twist, he turned on the radio and rock music blared through the speakers. He reached over and grabbed his lunchbox, opening it up and pulling out one of the neon pink vials. He hadn’t noticed inside, but the liquid had an almost crystalline translucence that made it glitter like a pink diamond. Turning it, he saw the potion glimmer, slipping thickly against the glass of the vial.

“It’s now or never, I suppose.” With a quick motion, he tipped the contents of the vial down his throat. The taste was… neon. There was not other way to describe it. It was like cracking open a glowstick and chugging the contents. He could swear that he could see the potion creeping down his throat and into his stomach. His belly grumbled as the potion hit. “Oh god yes… that feels good.” With a quick zip, he closed up the lunch box. “I can’t wait to slip Dan his…”

What he had not accounted for was that the 300mL vial was intended to be a concentrate, something to be mixed into fillers to dilute it to the proper dosage. Instead of the 250mg dose he thought he was taking, he had taken almost four full doses. The liquid burned through his veins, surging as his heart pounded in his thick chest. The cars speakers shifted, the sound of a ring coming over them. With a wicked grin, he pressed the button to answer the call.

“Hello, sir. How was your day on the trading floor?” Andy smiled. Dan worked erratic hours from home, meeting with clients all over the world and divesting them of their shares in multi-million-dollar companies. He was a shrewd trader. Somehow, he always knew which deals would pay off the best and would request to be paid in stock rather than in cash if his gut told him a company would do well. He had ridden the market’s bubbles all the way until they had burst and had quietly built a fortune to rival titans like Zuckerberg and Bezos.

“Mmm… I like that, baby. The first thing you do is ask me how I’m doing. Didn’t even consider yourself.”

“Well… I know I had a good day, babe. So, I gueeeess I can ask about yours.” He giggled, elongating his ‘guess’ with slight sarcasm. Andy licked his lips, thinking about how that would affect him once he got home. The minute long pause was palpable, swelling up like a balloon in his Tesla until it took up all the air. He could swear that he could hear the windows cracking. Andy shifted his feet uncomfortably, feeling the weight of the silence pressing on him. His leather shoes creaked as his toes flexed.

“Ahhh… are you feeling a little spicy today? Let’s see if I can’t get that out of you when you get home. I don’t think you need to have an attitude.”

“I think I’ve earned the right to be a little spicy, Danny. I had a really awesome day. So, I think I get to be a little bit bratty. You’re just gonna have to deal with it.”

“Danny? Not ‘sir’? Not ‘daddy’? Not even ‘Dan’?” Dan chuckled on the other end of the phone. “You’re cruising for a bruising, acting like a brat like that. I think we’re going to have to take away a few privileges.”

“Ahh… If you think I need to be punished, Danny, so be it… But I think that you’ll really like what I bring home. I managed to sneak a little something from the lab for us.” The little act of defiance was electric, coursing through his veins. Andy knew that Danny didn’t like when his power was challenged. He grunted and adjusted his collar, feeling the open buttons tighten ever so slightly.

He didn’t know it yet, but the thrill… the adrenaline from disobedience… it was doing much more than dance through his brain like Christmas lights. His thick pecs, already swollen from hours spent in the gym, had begun to swell. The round mounds of flesh thickened as power trickled into them. The tiniest bead of sweat began to slip down his neck into the deepening cleavage. His neck cracked a bit and started to swell outwards, corded muscle bulging under the skin. Andy’s delts rippled and swelled out, his shoulders pulling wider as he bit his lower lip. His khaki pants complained as his quads flexed and swelled outwards, pushing the legs tighter. His pant cuffs rose a fraction of an inch as his calves bulged out. His feet ached as his shoes reshaped around his swelling toes. His hair crept closer to the ceiling of the Tesla as his thick glutes swelled up, pushing him higher in the seat. The slight exertion made his cock throb in his pants. But, no matter how erotic, it was brief. It was a spasm, so he didn’t fully notice. He just felt the need to adjust himself.

“Well then, little one…” Andy shivered and practically melted at the growl from his lover. Dan was the only man he knew that had a deeper voice than his own. He swore he could hear the crystals in the library chandelier rattling. “…you might find that you have a fair bit to make up for once you get home if your news isn’t to my liking. Trading today did not go as well as I had hoped.” Dan sighed. “I only managed to make another fifty million today. I was hoping to get a certain deal with EnerTech to go through… but one of the old fogeys on the board wasn’t willing to sell his shares in the company. I only netted forty five percent for my client today, but I’ll be hitting it again tomorrow. He wants majority ownership before the end of the week, and it is a trillion-dollar company. If I land this deal, we’ll be set for life. I also snapped up majority ownership of a supplement company that I’m planning to sell off to the online supplement families… just a temporary acquisition.” Andy could hear his lover’s stress bubbling under the surface. The man had had a long day. He licked his lips, burning with desire. Dan would hopefully be having an even longer evening that led into the wee hours of the morning if he had his way. “I’ll see you soon.”

There was an almost perfunctory click as Dan put the phone down, hanging up. Andy screamed with delight. His blood bubbled as he thought of how he was pushing his dom’s buttons. He was already breathing hard with anticipation. He bit his lower lip and rubbed his crotch, a low moan slipping out. He couldn’t wait to poke the bear… hoping the bear would poke him right back. He took control of the car, pulling up to the gate that led to their shared estate. He pressed the remote on his keys and the heavy motorized gate swung open, iron bars creaking as the motor groaned. He drove in, car slipping down the oak lined driveway like a silver hind unknowingly fleeing into a cougar’s claws.

 

Constructive criticism always welcome!

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Love the title - it caught my attention right away!

The starting measurements:  6 feet tall, 275 pounds seem at first like an end goal rather than a start, so this story should be interesting!

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1. edit the last sentence at the end of paragraph 2.  You dropped something.  See "Everyone here was expected to do the same. Andy smiled as his eyes adjusted and zeroed in on the only other person in the lab, an elderly man by the name of Lewis Branson who had run the  [??  something's missing]"

2. Humor is always good in these types of stories, since the topic can get stale without variation.  I liked "...whistling “Animal Crackers in my soup…”"  even if I didn't understand how it applied in the situation - unless you meant to indicate that the scientists have goofy senses of humor using old Hollywood references in their work environment {"Shirley Temple"}

3.  I don't really know anything about the whole "Dom" "sub" culture, so the references don't mean anything to me.  I'm guessing that Andy/Andrew's behavior is testing the limits with his partner/Dom, hence the "Bratty" reference.  Is this supposed to be a relationship between equals, who are roleplaying, or is this something else?  My point being that the story doesn't make sense to me at this point.  I'm surmising this is some sort of sexual role play. with the sexy, muscular lab tech and the reclusive day trader acting out roles.  This should be an interesting ride!

4. Having said all that, I have to say that you write well and you have a fresh voice.  I'd keep in the humor when you can and try to avoid shoehorning in too much exposition unless it's essential to the plot or understanding the characters.  Why do I care that Andy can out flirt the girl lab tech?  Are they in some sort of competition? Why is his relationship with his mother relevant?  Hasn't he just exchanged one set of constra0ints for another?  Or is that the point? Or are you just demonstrating that Andy is shallow and vacuous? As a lab tech he can't be totally moronic.  He certainly knows how to be manipulative.

 Interesting start! I look forward to seeing where this goes!

Mdlftr

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3 hours ago, Mdlftr said:

Love the title - it caught my attention right away!

The starting measurements:  6 feet tall, 275 pounds seem at first like an end goal rather than a start, so this story should be interesting!

Comments:

1. edit the last sentence at the end of paragraph 2.  You dropped something.  See "Everyone here was expected to do the same. Andy smiled as his eyes adjusted and zeroed in on the only other person in the lab, an elderly man by the name of Lewis Branson who had run the  [??  something's missing]"

2. Humor is always good in these types of stories, since the topic can get stale without variation.  I liked "...whistling “Animal Crackers in my soup…”"  even if I didn't understand how it applied in the situation - unless you meant to indicate that the scientists have goofy senses of humor using old Hollywood references in their work environment {"Shirley Temple"}

3.  I don't really know anything about the whole "Dom" "sub" culture, so the references don't mean anything to me.  I'm guessing that Andy/Andrew's behavior is testing the limits with his partner/Dom, hence the "Bratty" reference.  Is this supposed to be a relationship between equals, who are roleplaying, or is this something else?  My point being that the story doesn't make sense to me at this point.  I'm surmising this is some sort of sexual role play. with the sexy, muscular lab tech and the reclusive day trader acting out roles.  This should be an interesting ride!

4. Having said all that, I have to say that you write well and you have a fresh voice.  I'd keep in the humor when you can and try to avoid shoehorning in too much exposition unless it's essential to the plot or understanding the characters.  Why do I care that Andy can out flirt the girl lab tech?  Are they in some sort of competition? Why is his relationship with his mother relevant?  Hasn't he just exchanged one set of constra0ints for another?  Or is that the point? Or are you just demonstrating that Andy is shallow and vacuous? As a lab tech he can't be totally moronic.  He certainly knows how to be manipulative.

 Interesting start! I look forward to seeing where this goes!

Mdlftr

1. Thank you! I have edited that.

2,4. I felt like giving that little glimpse into Andy's past, along with his mother, would explain him a bit. I promise, he's not going to stay vacuous for long. I don't fully want you to sympathize with him yet. He's supposed to come off as a spoiled brat rather than just a shameless flirt. As such, I really do appreciate your suggestions here. DM me with any specifics that you think would be helpful. I'm glad that you find me a fresh voice as I feel like I've improved since the last story I wrote!

3,4. The brat / Dom relationship is meant to be about testing limits. In the end they are equals, but the relationship has certain constraints. It's different from your typical submissive and dominant relationship in that the brat tries to push their Dom towards being more dominant by acting out or by disobeying. He can resist his Dom in ways he couldn't his mother. It is a little spicy when talking about dynamics. You are right that in some ways Andy has changed one set of constraints for a very similar one. I do find that I tend to over exaggerate my characters' personae when they're first introduced. I'm hoping that the second chapter helps contextualize this.

I really appreciate this! It's very good direction and it helps me sort of adjust my story. 

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2 hours ago, JayRubes said:

Holy. Hell. Please keep going. 

That's the plan! Hoping to crank out chapter 2 by the end of next week. Character building hehe

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