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Chapter 10

It was midnight. A normal one. And I was trying to fight against sleeplessness like every entity in the galaxy. And well, I lost. But not because was light sleeper, because it was extremely distracting to have someone stand right beside your bed and hold their dicks in ecstasy. And let me tell you, creepy as it was, that dick had the length of 9 inches at least. Was he making his way with that thing between?

Yesterday morning Daniel expressed his desire to get into the football team. He had gained a lot of confidence since the sudden growth spurt. And I supported him for that. Can’t say since when, but in tonight’s light I can probably say he had a crush on me. Which was exceptional to say the least. 

Even his hands holding that beast, carried the veins that ran through all his muscular arm. I could see the same veins connect at his neck, which was throbbing with his irregular breaths and small moans. Even through the darkness I could manage to see how his face was reddened, mouth open slightly tightly, small groans escaping between, and eyes shut tight.

His hand hastened, the sound was pretty much like humping an ass. 

Do you know how it’s like to be showered with gluey, white, substance, in the midnight, while trying to sleep? If you do, I must question what kind of life you lead. Because this was creepy as hell. He got a towel and hardly cleaned my face. 

“It was sweaty my dude,” he explained. Yeah, of course, ‘sweaty’. 

“What happened?” I asked lyingly sleepy.

“I wanna go to gym.”

“Right now? But it’s middle of the night.”

“I know, but I can’t sleep. There’s some kind of energy going around my body, I can’t just sleep.”

“But how will we get in?” 

“Leave that to me,” he groaned, as if that question gave him great pleasure. 

I was in my pajamas, and he was with only a tank top. The place was locked two large chains. Daniel gazed at them, his teeth glinting beneath a joyous smile. I knew what he was thinking, and couldn’t believe it. With the screech of metal, it was snapped into two, and the chains slung down, resignedly. 

“Now, the whole night is ours,” Daniel said.

I was scared. But Thomas said for me to be there for him… And I wasn’t thinking of backpedaling, not now.

“When did you get this…”

“Powerful? Well, after that day with you, I noticed it already. My height had increased just 2 inches, but for every inch my power doubled… I think we gotta try it again.”

I gulped. 3 times stronger, so it was enough to split metal into two this strongly…

“Do you like it?” he asked, eyeing me intently. 

Did I like it? Did I like how powerful he was getting? Maybe… I didn’t know exactly what I felt. Arousal was there, without a doubt. Wasn’t I the one who wanted him bigger? Why was I retaining now… this wasn’t the time for that. Daniel needs me, and if he wants power, I do too… I want him big. “I want you, bigger.”

His eyes widened with excitement. And suddenly the cold, almost scary aura vanished to his friendly hug. “That’s what I’m talking about,” he said, laughing.

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  • SecretlyWriting changed the title to College Fantasy (up to chap 10)

i admit, i dragged on too long to get to these parts. because i never wrote a good muscle growth story, so i was subconciously escaping from writing it. but here we are

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Chapter 11

I never truly understood what these gym equipments mostly were. My attention was completely on Daniel when we first came here. And it still was the second time. Although, Daniel obviously knows much more than me, I didn’t believe his attention was on what workout he was planning either. It was all on himself. He asked me to add more weights to his rod on bench press, but well, I couldn’t carry them. And he laughed and took them himself.

The metals clanked as they were added one after another, nonchalantly. It looked overly done from outside. Even after the seen at the entrance, this seemed, well, hard. And I wasn’t wrong. Daniel’s face turned coral in the first try, it looked as if even this shot wouldn’t have made to top. But it did. And the second. Up and down, and his face returned to its normal color as an immense delight appeared on his face. Every rep, it got easier, and his arms bulged in and out. But not just his arms. His whole body was getting stronger by the second. I could see how his once almost half a foot away flip-flopped feet left no distance, and grew past me. Half encircling me with his legs, in front of his crotch. Suddenly the shorts gave away and pillar of veined huge penis came into view. As Daniel was only playing with his toy now, he groaned to me, “Take it into your mouth.”

This? SERIOUS?! Holy shit. It was oozing with not so transparent precum. It looked sticky and thick. Apprehensively I approached it and slowly licked it.

“Not like a lollipop.” He laughed and suddenly rose from the chair. He seemed at least 7 feet now. How powerful does that make him? Almost as 500 times strong as his original strength. Mounts of muscles were uniting at his neck, and arms thick as much waist. “Here, I show you,” he said, wryly. 

Captured my head in his palm and then guided my mouth to open more. He was stretching my chin. And suddenly the head went in. It was almost choking me with the unnatural proportion of it. It was almost muscular on itself. 

One would you would be the one sucking a cock, but I felt like this beast was sucking me. My tongue was capture between the slight slit as Daniel groaned. “I need more,” he whispered between.

Then it freed my tongue and went in down my throat. It squeezed its way into there. I could feel outshaping of my throat. It got wider and I couldn’t breathe properly.

“Not now…” he said silently. Just like that, he left me. Without properly coming. I could see a small puddle of cum between my legs. I hadn’t even noticed.

I wanted to call out to him but my throat was so distorted the voice didn’t come out. And he left, leaving me in utter loneliness. 

What was going on? If not now, when?”

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  • SecretlyWriting changed the title to College Fantasy (up to chap 11)

3 chapters left, but i will try to make it longer since 15 sounds cooler. and i actually can write more but i wanna see your advices before the next episode, so i can write those better. i gotta confess, i am not very confident at all at writing erotic fiction :(. so every advice you leave is very important for me <3.

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10 hours ago, SecretlyWriting said:

Chapter 8.5 (you can skip this part, just build up and confusement)

Bluish dark sky with all its brilliant stars landed their dim light onto this isolated island of misery. There was a guy slowly, heavily walking down the road to his evidently inevitable death. Suffocating silence of the desert filled his lungs with sand. His feet were hardly able to clutch to ground, to step once again. He carried something heavy behind his back, and even though his life was threatened by exhaustion, he moved on, he marched on, he pushed on. 

The life had already made this man hardened against the deaths, his instincts were instantaneous, and his eyes were hawklike. But even for him this was an impossible adventure. Even for him, the story was fated. Even for him. But, this wasn’t for him. No. The thing he carried, a small cloth-wrapped baglike weight, was indeed hiding the soft innocence of a child. Not his child, this guy who hadn’t experienced love in any form, never had one. Never had the chance to. He didn’t know who he was even carrying, but he still moved on. Because something made him do it, like a whisper, whisper of gods. Or maybe his mind was trying to make-up excuses for his very human behavior.

With each movement sand subsided it’s place to dry, alkaline soil. The eye prickling particles of sand was replaced with the harsh dust of this deadly land. Hiding depth of it was replaced with the corpses of many people scattered around, mostly eaten by vultures.

I wish whoever there are, the god, the devil, whoever you are, please help me. If necessary take my life as a sacrifice, and give this small child another chance. I beg you. I beg you. I beg you. 

His mind slowly slowed down, hazily disappeared into the void. He wasn’t dead. Not yet anyway. But his conciseness was far too exhausted to continue. If only it wasn’t, what would have he said to the magnificent scene that befell them just after mere minutes from this fall. 

The deadly alkaline dust suddenly rose and filled the air in clouds with immense power. The earth shuttered and trembled as a rusty, metallic chest appeared from it’s creaks. 

When he woke up, man thought his voice was somehow heard. He took the child in the clothed bag, and put him into this chest. The chest gave the sound of locks at once and dived deep again. The old guy felt, and hoped he did the right thing. His existence for once, wasn’t in vain. That was what he felt before the adrenaline left his body and he died. 

I really love your writing it's like... so gloomy

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Hey! So, the best thing you're doing is consistently writing. And now it feels like you have a first chapter that you can put together that you can go back over and sculpt what you want from it. 

I think you're right that it takes a while to get to the part that's more interesting. I'm not talking about sex stuff or anything, rather... like, is your protagonist interesting? What makes them them? You start off with having them think that people are an annoyance,  so, is that your character's journey? To get over people being annoying?

And like, Persona 5 is one of the best games of all time, but I'm not sure what you're trying to do with it.

You have a few times where you're trying to do something cool, like a guy getting bigger, but you kinda have the growth over in one sentence. If you took a little more time in those sections, where you want something to sound cool, and gave it more description, and make it sound as cool as you want. Like when the guy grew to be bigger in the chair, take a sentence or two to compare the before and after.And give a bigger description of the effects of how they are bigger affects things after the growth

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28 minutes ago, Wild said:

Hey! So, the best thing you're doing is consistently writing. And now it feels like you have a first chapter that you can put together that you can go back over and sculpt what you want from it. 

I think you're right that it takes a while to get to the part that's more interesting. I'm not talking about sex stuff or anything, rather... like, is your protagonist interesting? What makes them them? You start off with having them think that people are an annoyance,  so, is that your character's journey? To get over people being annoying?

And like, Persona 5 is one of the best games of all time, but I'm not sure what you're trying to do with it.

You have a few times where you're trying to do something cool, like a guy getting bigger, but you kinda have the growth over in one sentence. If you took a little more time in those sections, where you want something to sound cool, and gave it more description, and make it sound as cool as you want. Like when the guy grew to be bigger in the chair, take a sentence or two to compare the before and after.And give a bigger description of the effects of how they are bigger affects things after the growth

Holy, these are really good points. Thanks 🙏. The only part i don't agree is that me being consistently writing. That's actually wrong, i write whenever i feel like it. That's why the consistency in the story gets hurt like in your perfectly valid examples

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Chapter 12

“Who are you?” I asked. Pinkish petals fluttered down, carrying the light of crystal clear sky. The blue was more blue than ever before. And the sun was there to complement it. It felt fresh. A strange breeze took the petals and leaves away from our chess board. There stood a boy, lilac eyed and black haired. His hair was untidy and his clothes were tattered all over. But he wore a mysterious smile regardless.

“I am a bodiless soul,” he answered. “It has been so long till I had chance to talk with someone.” He stretched to my side and moved a chess piece.

“So you are dead?”

“No, not necessarily. I have been stripped of my body long, long years ago. But at least in this form, I can wander between dreams.” This time he moved a piece from his side.

“So, this is a dream?”

“Yes. Nothing here is real, not even me, not even you. It’s a part of your never ending imagination. But you haven’t been at the control of that for a time now, have you…” He moved another chess piece from my side.

“What do you mean?” 

“See, the game is already over. You haven’t even been at the control of your own board.”

“But that’s because you cheated,” I said wonderingly. 

“No, you let me play for you. As you’ve done throughout this story. So, let me ask you the same question. Who are you?”

“I’m- I’m…”

“Noticed now, haven’t you.” He laughed. “You weren’t given any name at all, and we are so close to the ending.”

“I haven’t been given a name… Why?”

“Don’t you understand? Let me ask another question now, why are you annoyed of people.”

“Because I lose time.”

“But can’t you just deny them?”

“I… isn’t that rude?”

He laughed again. “So you think of what they think of you so much, you even can’t deny them?”

I can’t?

“That’s right. You can’t. Just like here, I played the game for you. This is how power works. You are so weak, that you let a simple wind drift you from the course of your road… Don’t you understand, how it all came to this. You hated people, because you were weak, weak to stand against them. Because they were powerful.”

“But I made friends.”

“And they controlled you. Persona 5 is such a good game right? It gives you choices to be with people, an illusion of control. But in the end, nothing matters and the story goes as it was meant to be. You never have the power, and this relieves you. You liked it. Having no responsibility, but thinking there is.”

“Where did I go so wrong.”

“Your existence is wrong. But I don’t think we have much choice left. The user of my body, an old wicked ghost, manipulated you to the point of making you join Daniel doing illegal deeds. See how power works, and the relationship between weak and strong. Daniel thought of you as the sign of powerful once. After all who could throw themselves into the heart of the danger so thoughtlessly. He was wrong, you were drifted into doing that. That’s what made you the main character. You let your instincts take control and do nothing. But this can’t go on forever. Or he will win, and there will be nothing left. You have to fight, no matter what.”

“Don’t you think people will be bored to read long paragraphs of dialogue suddenly?” I blurted out.

“So you still let them take the control and don’t act yourself?”

Uh, I see. Now it all makes sense. That’s what power is. That’s what Daniel wanted to be. Ruler of his destiny. 

“We haven’t got time anymore,” said the boy. “You will be given the choice when the time comes. Until then, fight.”
 

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  • SecretlyWriting changed the title to College Fantasy (up to chap 12)

I started to think about what muscle growth truly is and i noticed it's all about power. And power can never be enough. And some people don't want power, they want to worship. And some people want to be the most powerful but have others strong too, as long as they are the biggest. And the reverse of course. 

 

The idea behind this chapter is: The boy and the main are two sides of the same coin. One is judgement and the other is instincts.(mind vs guts, brain vs heart) They work together to lead life, but it's always a competition to take the power between the two in any human. So i can safely say i made a self insertion.

 

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