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Great writing as usual Londonboy.

Hey guys, sorry for letting you all wait! Thanks, @Musclebulge, for motivating me by writing me a reminding DM. I'll repost my core answer here: I am currently adding stuff and slightly rewritting the story as I had lost inspiration and found quite the annoying plotholes in the concept. Having too many ideas can be an issue. I'll post an update what changed (by editing this and all previous posts) and will head over to give life to my outline I have done so far. Stupid thing is, the ending is already written but it just doesn't fit element-wise anymore. Hence, there is a lot of rewritting to be done. But it's not dead, just a delayed continuation! Okay, next, I'll point out all the changes to you - starting from the first revision! Startingheights: I changed the starting heights and hairyness. Robby (1.6) and Jad (hairy 1.9m) - still a difference but less outstanding to the crowd. Less opponents and external people: I soon excluded that way too boring medical element and also reduced the military impact. An involutary operation, resulting in the death of Jad's father should be enough to sue. At least so much to have peace forever. As this not being a fun context, I later decided to almost completely remove the military and medical aspect. To me, it does feel better and simplfies the situation.  Familiy-Situation changed: I altered Jads' family-situation and the moving to Jads village to less dead members and less pain. More father-son-romance: Before they move to the little village, there is a lot more romantics, tension and "drama" between Robby and Jad.  More pictures and better positions: Pictures now fit better and the age changes plus emotions unfold more naturally. Better placed drama: As of fear and rejection, I still try to reduce it to a minimum. It does disrupt the erotic energy after all. Though, I found it really important to get the sitations relateable throughout the whole story. I apologize if I trigger someone's trauma. But loss and fear is part of the story. Bigger themes: I have considered to add macro, vore, lactation, and stretchyness. As this is a semi-realistic romance, it shouldnt feel too much off but I'll to try to expand to these elements. Better placed sex: As the story orginally based on a fast-paced roleplay with a RAPIDLY growing dad and evoled into SO MUCH MORE, I grasped that the occations of sex plus the talks happen either randomly or way too late. So I moved a few chapters back and forth. I streamlined the anticipation and forshadowing by focussing on Robby taking Jad. It's their first big goal in the first part of the whole story. Growth: I noticed I didn't like the way growth happened in this story. So, I changed the three puberty element to "random" puberties with the characteristic that all of them can lead to sudden death or sudden rejuvination. I streamlined it by changing a few paragraphs when talking about size to passive/normal growth. The story then changes it's theme after Jaddy and Roby finally have their craved fuck become true. As of later, things unfold quicker and more growy/rapid. Compared to earlier, it's now wanted that way and helps me to separate emotions and mechanics... Writing per se: Improved details and ways of writing everywhere. I admittedly used ChatGPT to improve a few epic landscape and drama scenes because I am really bored writting these neccessary scenes. I admittedly loved the outcome and integrated the textparts right away. You can tell which parts are not written by me. I'll mark chapters, if you want me to... I apologize for forcing you to re-read over and over. But I am convinced it's worth it! Tell me what you think! I am quite proud and amazed there is so much interest.   Edit: Revison until Chapter 26 is done so far...

What a fantastic story! I love the unique “take” on one of my favorite muscle growth themes, muscle theft. I like how you handled the battle of the apexes too. I was hoping that would eventually be a part of the story, and you included it and handled it perfectly. Lastly, I’m glad our narrator gets to continue being part of Austin’s life without becoming a total husk creature.    I know you said this is the end, but I’d love to see a sequel with the campaign and Austin taking over Congress and beyond.