muscleaddict Posted October 18, 2018 Author Share Posted October 18, 2018 19 hours ago, Aronymous said: Love it. Just want to give you a tip, so you can prevent what I often see happening in other stories: don't give the readers what they want too quickly. Now AJ & Noah are 'together', but where is the tension, the secrecy, the mystery ; ) . Be sure that we're big fans and always waiting for the next part, and I can handle a few episodes without. But those qualities in a story are important for readers to keep wanting more, to want to know what happens next, in the long term. If you don't somehow cause conflict or reasons for the previously mentioned qualities to occur, stories can get flat and repetitive. It then loses a sense of purpose, so to say. You've done really well on those qualities so far, so just want to make sure you continue to keep doing that. This is brilliant feedback and advice! Thank you @Aronymous! As I've said a few times, the whole thing's done, save for a bit of polishing and I don't plan to make any extensive re-writes at this stage. Not to sound like a broken record and keep repeating myself but it's SO hard to comment on certain things without giving too much away but I completely get what you're saying here, mate. And I very much feel like I'm still growing as a writer so feedback like this is invaluable. 4 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Popular Post muscleaddict Posted October 21, 2018 Author Popular Post Share Posted October 21, 2018 New chapter. I'm going to try and go back to posting these more regularly, like I was doing at the beginning of the story. And because it was a while ago that I shared them I'm going to re-post the couple of illustrations my mate did for me too (here's his Instagram if you wanna see more of his stuff)! Starting with the illustration of AJ... Twenty Four “So I’m thinking of quitting both of my jobs and taking up a new one!” I was lying on my bed and dreamily grinning into my phone screen as AJ messaged me during his break from a Tesco shift. “Hehe! Oh yeah?” I messaged back, playing along. Three dots appeared. “Yep! It’s quite an unusual job though!” “I’m listening!” I typed. I had no idea what AJ was going to say next, but I was fairly certain it was going to be something awesome, cute and funny. I wasn’t wrong. “Get this. A full time Noah Cook Snuggler Upper!” Heart melting. Body bursting. Could AJ be any fucking cuter or more adorable? I sent through a series of emojis. The shocked face, the monkey holding his mouth and the blushing face with eyes wide open emoji. “Hmmm. I think I’ve heard about that position! Apparently there are a few requirements for the role!” I typed. “Yeah??” AJ messaged back. “Yep! Apparently you can only apply if you’re a VERY cute bodybuilder with massive tits, huge guns, gorgeous abs and a habit for flexing while cheekily sticking your tongue out!” AJ sent through three of the AJ emoji’s. “Noah! I’m actually kind of blushing here! But I erm…think I might qualify?” And he adorably followed it up with the blushing face emoji. “Oh, you definitely do!” Three dots. “So my abs are gorgeous?” “Haha! Yep. I love your abs!” “GRRRRRR!! Will have to crunch ‘em for ya!” “Ummm…FUCK YEAH!!” I replied, excitement surging through me and my cock instantly swelling. “I’ve actually been thinking about posing for you quite a lot!” AJ then messaged. FUCKING HELL!! I sent through three shocked face emojis. “Hehe! I actually kind of can’t wait!!” AJ messaged. “Erm … excuse me while I just spontaneously combust with excitement. HELL YEAH!!” I replied. “I keep thinking about how you reacted when you were feeling my flexed bicep. Your face. How turned on you were. What it did to you. How you had to shoot your load right there and then. It was the HORNIEST fucking thing! And I LOVED that my muscles had that effect on you!” Fuck, fuck, fucking fuck FUUUUCK!! I couldn‘t believe what I was actually reading on my screen. “It was HANDS DOWN one of the hottest fucking experiences of my life!!” I replied, feeling a rush at how open and honest I was being. “Just wait ‘till I pose for you!” AJ messaged. ARGGHHHH!! My head felt like it was going to fucking explode. I suddenly had the urge to make a further confession. “There’s actually something else about bodybuilders that really does it for me!” I messaged, my pulse quickening. “Tell me!” AJ ordered. “Well I kind of have a bit of a thing for posing trunks!” I bravely typed, followed by the blushing face emoji. As three dots appeared on my phone, a series of imaginary replies from AJ quickly flashed into my mind. “That’s weird!” “You’re a freak.” “I don’t wanna see you anymore.” And then his actual message came through. “OMG!! Haha!! REALLY??” “Yep!” I replied, with the blushing face emoji again. “Hmmm. You know what?! I’ve always thought posers were kinda sexy!” FUCK! My heart leapt as I read those words. “Really??” I replied. A part of me couldn’t help wondering whether AJ was just humouring me. But another, much bigger part told me that he was being completely genuine. “Yeah! There’s definitely something hot about them. I totally get it!” AJ typed. “They’re hot as FUCK!!” I typed, followed by the AJ emoji. “They’ve got to be the shiny ones though!” I added. “Of course! That goes without saying!” AJ typed. “So, erm … do my lime green ones do it for you?” It was such a ridiculous fucking question that I couldn’t suppress a giggle as I looked at the message. “Ummm…HELL YES!! They’re so hot it borders on insane!” Three of the AJ emojis came through. “Well now I know what I’ll be wearing when I pose for you. Although I was kinda planning on wearing them anyway!” Fucking. Fucking. FUUUUUCK!! My cock was juddering and I reached down and gave it a squeeze through my jeans at the thought of AJ posing for me in his shiny, lime green trunks, which, incredibly, he was teasing he was going to do, presumably fairly soon. Holy fucking HELL! And then a text came through which suddenly pulled me out of my thoughts and made me quickly release my hand from my throbbing hard on. “Oi! You didn’t reply to my text!” It was Naomi. She was referring to the message she’d sent me the day before when she’d asked if everything was okay between AJ and I. I guess I’d found it easier to just ignore her after AJ had asked me not to tell her what had happened between us. “Sorry! I was with AJ!” I text. “Ooooh!! What’s going on? Did you talk about his Facebook messages?” Shit! Fuck, bugger, shit! I usually told Naomi everything. How was I supposed to lie to her? But AJ had asked me to not to say anything. So that was exactly what I was going to do. “He said it was all a bit of a blur.” It wasn’t a lie. AJ had said that. About ten minutes before we were wrapped around each other on his bed naked. “Oh! Are you OK with that?” she text back. I paused. “I’m happy with how things are.” Also not a lie! “Hmmmm. Well I still think something’s gonna happen between you two!” And I smiled. If only she knew the truth. “Off gallivanting again?” my mum asked me the day after as I was filling up my water bottle in the kitchen with my backpack slung over my shoulder. I was waiting for AJ to pick me up in his car to take me to Scorpio’s. It would be our first trip since we’d confessed our feelings towards each other and slept together. An excitement was pulsing through my body, because I was about to see my cute, gorgeous AJ again for the first time in two days. “Ummm … if you mean am I going out, then yes! To the gym, if you must know!” I informed her. “Hmmmm!” my mum said, eyeing up my backpack with one eyebrow raised. “I hope you’re not taking this gym thing too far!” I screwed up my face. “How would I do THAT?!” “Well I wouldn’t like to see you getting too buff! You look fine as you are!” she replied. I smirked and rolled my eyes. And then she said something which made my whole body jolt while I prayed for the ground to swallow me up whole. “There’s a boy who works at Tesco’s …” Oh God. “He’s only about your age. A lovely lad …” Ohgodohgodohgod. “He’s really friendly. Always saying hello …” She’s talking about AJ! She’s fucking talking about AJ!! “And he’s got such a nice face! But, ooooh, Noah. He’s soooo muscly!” Oh my FUCKING GOD. “You should see him! His arms are out here!” And then she bought her arms and elbows up so they were sticking out either side of her in imitation of a big, built bodybuilder and I wanted to fucking DIE. “Please don’t get that big, Noah! You wouldn’t want to look like that, would you?” I rolled my eyes and quickly shuffled out of the room, hoping she hadn’t noticed that my face had gone bright red, while all the time repeating the same thing over and over in my head; That did not just happen. That did NOT just fucking happen! I was more nervous than ever when I spotted AJ’s car pulling up at the top of the drive. I quickly and quietly sneaked out. Why couldn’t he have parked down the road like I’d asked him to? I honestly think part of him wanted to make me squirm. But also I think maybe it was a little bit of a payback thing. I had a theory that he was secretly a little offended by the fact I wouldn’t let my mum see him. Maybe he feared I was partly worried about what she’d think of the fact he was now a bodybuilder? Embarrassed, even? Maybe in a small way he’d actually been right? “Oh my GOD!” I groaned as I jumped in the passenger seat and put my face in my hands. “What‘s up?!” AJ asked me, giggling. I shook my head and gave him a little smirk. FUCK! He looked as huge and gorgeous as ever in his tight, blue Tesco’s polo shirt. GRRRR!! I was so fucking happy to see him. “You won’t believe what my mum just said to me! Drive NOW and I’ll tell you!” I said. AJ was grinning and looking at me curiously. He twisted his head and peered at my house through the car window. “Is she looking?!” GAAAHH!! He turned back to face me. “It’s just … I really wanna kiss you!” FUCK! I melted. God, I wanted it too. He put his hand on my leg and I instantly started to swell. Then he leaned towards me. Worried about the possibility of my mother peeping through the window, but also feeling a surprising rush at the propsect of being caught, my whole body tingled as my lips met AJ’s and we kissed. “Fuck!” I whispered, as our lips parted, and I anxiously looked to my house for any sign of my mum with her hands to the side her eyes, pressed up to the window. As AJ started up the car, he cheekily shook his head. “This is gonna be TORTURE!” he said. I giddily grinned. “What?!” I asked. “You KNOW what!” he said. Then he looked me up and down and bit his lip. It was so fucking sexy. I did know what, of course. Being at Scorpio’s, being in public, even just being in a car and not being able to kiss each other, touch each other and do all of the things we’d been doing the past week in his bedroom. If it was going to be torturous for AJ, it was going to an absolute killer for me. I told AJ what my mum had said about him before I’d left, emphasising the fact she’d called him lovely, really friendly and that he had a nice face. All of it amused and flattered him. “I can’t believe she doesn’t recognise me!” AJ exclaimed. “I can!” “I’m sure she’d come round once she got used to me being a monster!” he said, with a cheeky grin. “Well she loved you when we were kids,” I reassured him. “Awww! Did she?” he said, with a coy smile. “Of course! And my sister. You were cute, cheeky, little AJ. And now you’re cute, cheeky, HUGE AJ. With twenty inch biceps! And arms out here!” I said, imitating the way my mum had stuck her arms out. AJ laughed. “Oh, my mum mentioned you too, by the way! She was like, Awwww, I’m so glad you’re friends with Noah again!” “Awwww!” I said, feeling fuzzy inside. “I love your mum!” “Oh, she did question why you went bright red when Andy walked in, though!” I laughed and shook my head. “FUCK OFF!” I was half expecting AJ to kiss me again in the car park outside Scorpio’s, so I couldn’t help feeling a stab of disappointment when he didn’t. Maybe he felt it was too risky, and that someone would see us? Being with AJ at Scorpio’s definitely felt different now that things between us were no longer just platonic. It had felt a lot more fun too. He’d given me a couple of cheeky, knowing grins when he’d been getting undressed in the changing rooms. And he’d teased me about the pictures of the shredded freaks on the walls of the gym; asking me if I thought various bodybuilders were hot, and whether I’d like to see certain guys flexing in their posing trunks. And as AJ had predicted, it was fucking torturous. Being with him as he pumped up in his vest. Not being able to kiss him, wrap my arms around his huge mass, nuzzle into his thick, bull neck or cheekily squeeze his flexed bicep again. But all the time there was this incredible excitement, because I knew that there was a very good chance I would get to do all, or at least some, of those things when we’d go back to his afterwards. “Is your mum and Andy home?” I asked on the car journey back, my stomach twisting as I waited for the answer. “Why?! Wanna perv on Andy again?” he said. I grinned and rolled my eyes. “Erm … I think they’re home.” he added, casually. A little too casually, I thought. My heart dropped a little. Was the prospect of being home alone not an exciting one for AJ like it very much was for me? And just when was I going to get the noisy posing (FUCKING HELL!) he’d teased me about? Maybe it would be better if it was a spontaneous thing? But none of that doubt could take away the giddiness I was, and had been, feeling all evening. Because I was with AJ. And I would still get to kiss him and touch him and maybe even squeeze his flexed bicep. It would probably just be a little more restrained than if we were at his house alone. The first thing I noticed when AJ’s house was in sight was that Andy’s motorbike was parked on the drive. But then I noticed something else. “Your mum’s car isn’t here?” I questioned, as we pulled into the drive. “Nope!” AJ replied. And then he looked at me with this devilish grin. “They’re not gonna be home ‘till late!” FUCK! “Oh, and look at that …” he continued, looking down at his body. “I’m all pumped up!” FUUUUUCKKK!! My cock instantly swelled and I felt like I was going to explode with excitement. AJ gave a playful sigh and shook his head. “If only I had a cute, horny guy with a massive thing for bodybuilders to pose for!” 30 1 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
just Posted October 21, 2018 Share Posted October 21, 2018 Yes!!! The first real full fledged worship session coming up? Noah is going to throughly enjoy those green posers and AJs pumped muscle... so good. Awesome work, MuscleAddict! Keep it up, please!!! Definitley looking forward to the next chapter. 3 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Built22 Posted October 21, 2018 Share Posted October 21, 2018 man yes!!!!! next chapter muscle worship!!!! look forward to this story all the time , love seeing the update notifications and love seeing notifications from muscleaddict even more !!!! this story is amazing please please dont ever stop posting it !!! 3 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
muscleaddict Posted October 21, 2018 Author Share Posted October 21, 2018 4 hours ago, Built22 said: man yes!!!!! next chapter muscle worship!!!! look forward to this story all the time , love seeing the update notifications and love seeing notifications from muscleaddict even more !!!! this story is amazing please please dont ever stop posting it !!! Hehe! Bless you, mate! Well it will obviously be coming to an end at some point but I'm still considering a spin off/follow up! 3 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
muscleaddict Posted October 21, 2018 Author Share Posted October 21, 2018 5 hours ago, just said: Yes!!! The first real full fledged worship session coming up? Noah is going to throughly enjoy those green posers and AJs pumped muscle... so good. Awesome work, MuscleAddict! Keep it up, please!!! Definitley looking forward to the next chapter. Thanks, mate! Next one's polished and ready to go! 3 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BrzNLA Posted October 21, 2018 Share Posted October 21, 2018 Just great chapter mate. LAMO I love the set up for the next chapter. I can’t wait for the muscle worship session. You ended the chapter just right letting us hang. ARGH. I can’t wait either for AJ to meet Noah’s mom. I just can’t wait period. I know I’m repeating myself but I’m totally in love with Noah and AJ. Keep on the good work and thank you for making my Sunday morning just a little more special. 3 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
muscleaddict Posted October 21, 2018 Author Share Posted October 21, 2018 11 minutes ago, BrzNLA said: Just great chapter mate. LAMO I love the set up for the next chapter. I can’t wait for the muscle worship session. You ended the chapter just right letting us hang. ARGH. I can’t wait either for AJ to meet Noah’s mom. I just can’t wait period. I know I’m repeating myself but I’m totally in love with Noah and AJ. Keep on the good work and thank you for making my Sunday morning just a little more special. Glad you're still enjoying it, matie! I think the story was probably due another cliffhanger! AJ meeting Noah's mum? Hmmm. That could be interesting! 3 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Posted October 21, 2018 Share Posted October 21, 2018 I am so completely in love with these characters. You've managed to create real depth of personality in both AJ and Noah, which is no easy feat. I've also been thinking about the timing of your posts- the serial format gives me such a sense of anticipation. I look forward to reading each new chapter and always want more. It's so refreshing to have this experience. You're a terrific author. I've been around since the old site, but only came out of lurking to comment with this story. I really hope you're considering publishing this on Amazon- I'd love to have a copy of the complete product when you're done posting it on here. As always, thank you for another tantalizing chapter! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BrzNLA Posted October 21, 2018 Share Posted October 21, 2018 1 hour ago, muscleaddict said: Glad you're still enjoying it, matie! I think the story was probably due another cliffhanger! AJ meeting Noah's mum? Hmmm. That could be interesting! Enjoying it? No, I’M LOVING IT Mate! I look forward to every chapter because the story is so well written, the characters sound and feel real. Plus, of course, all the Muscle Worship and Sex helps it too. 3 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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